The concept of this story is good. As a matter of fact, it is the part that I like the most out of it. The characters are not bad, but I don't think they are very good either.

Title Reviewed: The Desert and The Ocean
Reviewed by: teo gonzalez

That was awesome. The characters were fun and cool and there was a lot of originality in the world you've created. I'd love to learn more about the this city.

Title Reviewed: Secret City Blues
Reviewed by: nocturnal_hurdles

This is a very old fashioned ghost story in lots of ways. An interesting concept, followed through to its logical conclusion. More or less, what you would expect from a ghost short story.

Title Reviewed: EL VALOR
Reviewed by: badgebarman

inside is a crime thriller about frank, an alcoholic gambler who seemingly gets framed for a heist. the concept is pretty standard for the genre. the story has all the twists and turns that you would expect.

Title Reviewed: Inside(v4)
Reviewed by: gregoir

I liked your story, and as I've stated above, I felt it had a certain kind of charm to it. What I liked best had to be the dialogue of the pirates. I really thought you pulled that off well.

Title Reviewed: MAGIC ATTIC
Reviewed by: J. P. Cubb

Hi Johnny, In my notes hereunder I mentioned an artistic 'moment' in The Desert and The Ocean. The beginning of this script promised that and indeed, there were touches at the end.

Title Reviewed: The Desert and The Ocean
Reviewed by: Susan P.

I normally take a couple of days to read and review a screenplay, this one I read in one sitting. Why? Simple.

Title Reviewed: Clutter
Reviewed by: badgebarman

The subject of child abuse is very sensitive and overall you've done a good job with the tough scenes. I like the twist that reveals the real molester towards the end but I have to admit you confused me with the bit about the TV program "how to catch a sex offender". I was expecting Luke to get in touch with the guys from the program, tell them about his case, the usual stuff we see on TV.

Title Reviewed: The Web
Reviewed by: disaxster

Wow. What was this all about? I actually took the trouble to read this three times.

Title Reviewed: In a Field
Reviewed by: badgebarman

I've read a lot of stories on TriggerStreet that are drug related,most of them, to be honest aren't very good. This was slightly different, as it tried to go inside the mind of someone on a trip. But it still didn't work for me. Does everyone who does drugs turn into a vengful, violent and emotionally charged person?

Title Reviewed: The Plug
Reviewed by: badgebarman

This is a good first draft - a little rough around the edges, but with potential. While I've seen many of the elements before, (e.g. - a rebellious youth fighting a sanitized, totalitarian society; "jacking in" to control a virtual avatar; etc) there is one aspect that I found new and intriguing and would encourage you to develop it much more: Kaliroy's Avatar fighting her.

Title Reviewed: TIMESCAPE
Reviewed by: Michael Keller

FIRST 10 PAGES ** I felt the first ten pages were flat and uninteresting. Where is the hook? Since this is a comedy the humor between the cab driver and the protagonist needs to be very on as far as the humor is concerned.

Title Reviewed: Golden Opportunity (REV2)
Reviewed by: kam300

The author explains in her notes that this was written a long time ago, and she asks the question ' Should I chuck it?' My answer is a resounding YES! It's a story that modern society knows all too well, the drug culture tale has been told that many times in print and on screen, that it's very difficult to find a way to tell an original story.

Title Reviewed: Enough for Two
Reviewed by: badgebarman

The screenplay Cul-de-sac was properly formatted by the author which is where I will begin. The characters became quite dubious in their roles for this genre though, being described as a mystery and Suspense.. The character of Herschel caught me as being quite dubious in his nature.

Title Reviewed: cul-de-sac
Reviewed by: Brandon Wyse

Peter, I hope you'll find the following review useful in improving your screenplay and getting it to the next level. First, I'd like to begin by mentioning that as every screenplay is written they each have potential.

Title Reviewed: Karaoke Kevin
Reviewed by: Rosencrantz&Guildenstern

I think the story is pretty good. I think you as a writer need to focus on using fewer simple sentences and also try and not write in the passive voice. Possibly a little more dialogue.

Title Reviewed: The Plug
Reviewed by: Robert-Zimmerman1

You're dark descriptive style is very strong and you do a great job of keeping the reader interested. I struggled a little understanding some of the flashback scenes, like that first dream sequence but that is only a small gripe. You do a great job of describing the moment and I always felt like I was in there with Adam, inside his head space.

Title Reviewed: The Plug
Reviewed by: timbin

The Unbuggered p1 "A modern California kitchen in a modorn California ranch house." what a yawn inducing opening line of description. What exactly does "modern" look like anyway.

Title Reviewed: The Unbuggered (V.2)
Reviewed by: dbenamor

This movie was beautifully filmed and the audio and music were perfect. Attention to detail with all the candles was well done. The scenes with the devil were nicely filmed.

Title Reviewed: Within
Reviewed by: rcf23

This is my first review here. I must say that I was impressed by this flick. The story was a little weird but I enjoyed it thoroughly.

Title Reviewed: Reverie
Reviewed by: rcf23